Saturday, 17 August 2013

Creative writing, 'The Room' 1st Draft





The Room


'I roused from an uneasy sleep. I opened my eyes but it was hard to see anything. There was very little light in the room. Where was I? My heart began to pound. This was not my room. My eyes adjusted to the light. I could just make out the walls of the room. They seemed drab and discoloured. Was I dreaming? It must be a dream. I went to sleep in my own bed. I closed my eyes and opened them again. Still the same; it was not a dream!

I yelled and ran in circles. What could I do? Suddenly I had an idea. I tried to find a way out; a door or a window maybe. There was one window, but it had bars across it. It made me feel as if I was in jail. But no, nothing else. There must be an exit if there was an entrance. Suddenly my eyes fell on some boxes. They were shiny; empty, but didn't look normal. They were made of steel! Brown steel?! I tried violently shoving the boxes to the side; however, they were too heavy. I tried lifting off the boxes one by one. It worked! Speckles of dust threw up into the air. I started to cough, but the dust soon went. I glanced over to the other side of the room and saw a hole in the wall. A dumbwaiter! I dashed towards my potential way out... I could actually escape the room! I climbed in. Down I went. Far, far down. I climbed out...

I found myself in a tunnel with carved sides, patterns, an array of colours. I was in a priest hole! My history teacher wasn't mad after all.

Anyhow, I went through the tunnel and noticed white bones covered in dirt and rotting flesh. The sell was pungent and repulsive. I took a closer look and found that the bones belonged to a... SKELETON! EEEWW! I continued walking through the tunnel. The tunnel started to collapse behind me. Rocks started to fall. I started to breathe heavily. Suddenly, I found that I was trapped inside the tunnel; I was too late; too slow. I tried to push the rocks away from me when my hands started glowing bright red; suddenly, I realized why I was here; I had supernatural powers; the stories were true! I had: super strength; laser eyes; super speed and super intelligence. I pushed my way out of the rocks in front of me. I saw a trap door above me. I started to climb the end of the collapsing rocky tunnel. It was really hard work. Beads of sweat poured down my red face. Finally it touched the old, cracked lifeless wood of the trap door. The word 'ESCAPE' kept going through my mind.

Free at last... or was I? I hauled my tired body up only to find I was in the dull boring room again. I knew I wouldn't be able to get out of the room with my powers. There was no excitement in the dull room as I searched urgently to find an escape. There was absolute silence. There were no other people… or were there?

Suddenly I heard footsteps drawing closer and closer. A light shone at me. I ducked and slowly went towards the light source.

Thud! I knocked the 'man' off his feet and ran as fast I could. I knew the man was chasing me. But I had an even bigger on my hands; I couldn't see where I was going. I slowed down, knowing that if I ran I would run into the white wall, since I couldn't see (the light were off, it was night). As blind as a baby bat, I started to feel my way to the dumbwaiter (it was really hard since there weren't much things, only: a torch; a stick; a dirty bed and boxes). Suddenly I saw it, the dumbwaiter, but so did the man. I hid behind the boxes as the man approached my way... He suddenly disappeared as though it was real magic. I thought I should go down into the tunnel. I went down. I saw a boy in front of me. We both screamed. The boy had a pet bird (budgie; type of parrot) with him he also had a torch, Sorry, I said to him. Suddenly, the floor started to give way. We fell and found ourselves in a dark place. Awais (the boy) switched in his torch. It was dim, that meant the battery was running low. O oh, we both thought. Suddenly we saw 5 tunnels. I said we should take the bottom left tunnel, mainly because there was light coming from it, but Awais said it was a trap and scrambled though the bottom right tunnel. I had no choice but to follow him. I knew Awais from school (when I went there before I came here!) And I also knew that he wouldn't turn back.As we made our way through the tunnel, we only found ourselves in the room again: so much for traps!

Suddenly, we found ourselves in front of our families. I jumped onto my dad but he shook me off.

Awais' brother laughed, " Having fun little kids?! Well your about to have more!"

Our parents (and siblings) were the ones responsible for where we were. We never thought our own families would betray us! We were lost!! NOOOOOOOOOO!!

Our parents disappeared but what did they leave behind? An indestructible Robo-6000! Awais ran for his life, but me? I fought the Robo-6000. I kept fighting it off. It wasn't too hard. But then, I lost concentration for a split second and suddenly, I was cornered. Would Robo-6000 show mercy and let me go...???

                                                                                     Aadi Gupta

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